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Monday, October 23, 2006

First Draft Story

Patricia like all the days, was very bored because she didn't have friends. She didn't go to school, so every evening she wanted to go to the mall. She didn't worry about money because she was the richest person in all her town.

"Mom, do you want to go with me to the mall?" Said Patricia.

"Sure, let's go." Answered her mom.

Mom and Patricia were walking to the mall because her car was at her father's work. While they were walking her mom and she saw a poor vendor that sell bread. He was called Carlos.

"Hi Carlos, how are you doing?" said Patricia's mom.

"Bad because I don't have money to buy food for my family." Said Carlos.

"Ok, I am going to give you $100 so you can give to your family some money and food." Said Patricia's mom.

"Oh Thanks miss you are such a good person god bless you." Said Carlos.

Patricia was impresed because her mom had gived money to a such poor and disgusting man.

"Mom! are you crazy you are wasting the money to buy our things." Said Patricia.

"Patricia please stop it, you need to become a better person". Said Patricia's mom.

Patricia start doing a lot of faces to her mom, Patricia was very mad about it.

Walking to the mall Patricia and her mom didn't talk about anything they were very angry. While they were walking they found his dad in his car. His dad gave them a ride to the mall because it was a little far.


"Patricia do you need some money to buy things?". Said her father.

"Yes, because mom gave all the money to a poor vendor". Said, Patricia.

"Ok, here you have $1,000 to buy everything you want to". Said her dad.

"thanks dad you are the best." said Patricia.

Patricia's mom was very surprised about how much money had gived her husband to her daughter. Well, after a few minutes they got to the mall.

First she went to a shoe shop. It was called Bosi it was so expensive but she can buy all she want because she had a lot of money. Her mom was very impressed because Patricia was buying too much. Patricia didn't put attention on her mom because she loved to shop and she was so concentrated shopping. The check was of $100.

Then Patricia and her mom went to Limited Too, Forever 21, Abercrombie and Fitch. She bought trousers, shirts, and skirts. First she saw a blue skirt that was very beautiful but she saw a skirt that was of all the colors it was like a rainbow she was fasinated but the skirt cost $50 but Patricia didnt care because she had a lot of money.

Going out of the shop Patricia told her mother that she was very hungry so if they can go to McDonalds, and her mom said yes.

While eating the food they were talking about a lot of things.

"Patricia you should be a little bit more considered about people you know that you have a lot of money and you are buying and buying a lot of things." Said her mom.

"So what if I have a lot of money and I can buy whatever I want so mom it's not your problem." Said Patricia.

"Ok, you are right it's not my problem but I am your mom and I dont want you to suffer when you are an adult." Said Patricia's mom.

After a while they finished eating and they went walking to home.

While walking her mom start feeling a little pain in her stomach but she dind't worry about it. They got to the house and Patricia was going to show her dad all what she bought but her dad was talking on the phone so she could not show anything to him. Her mom was watching T.V. and she felt the same pain that she felt before but it was greater it was hurting a lot. She told Patricia and her husband if they could go to the hospital with her.

Mom, I need to organize what I bought so I can't go." Said Patricia.

Her mom went with her husband;during the ride Patricia's mom died.

When Patrcia knew that this happened she was shocked. She never thought about this because she had a perfect life. From this day Patrcia became another person. She start doing all the things her mom did. She gaved Carlos all days money for his family and she treated him very good. She told his father that she wanted to go to school. She start being a friendly person. She shared things and all this. Over all Patrcia became another person.

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